Unsanctioned
On a dark winter’s night, a child signs a contract with a man dead to the world.
Promised an upbringing filled with forbidden knowledge, the two enter a strange and isolated existence together.
After nineteen years, the sanctuary and prison you have come to know as your home is discovered, and the land finally learns that the villain they believed to have perished a century prior has merely been in hiding…and that he isn’t alone.
Separated and forced to flee, you’re once again released into the world without your master’s hand to guide you. Only now, he is no longer the only one adept at the unsanctioned arcane arts.
“Unsanctioned” is a 170k word 17+ interactive novel where you play as the apprentice of an ostracized sorcerer. It’s set in a dark fantasy world where magic is simultaneously a symbol of status and strictly supervised.
The demo currently covers the first part of the prologue, which features three different backgrounds to choose from, the second part of the prologue and the beginning of chapter one.
✢ Three backgrounds to choose from which will shape your MC and their relationship with the world, impact their pool of knowledge, their countenance, and how others might react to them.
✢ Three races to choose from: elf, human or the shunned cryn.
✢ A complicated parental relationship at the heart of the narrative.
✢ A cast of potential – and not entirely lawful – companions who you can forge various relationships with.
✢ Around five full-fledged romances, along with casual flings you may try to pursue along the way.
✢ Choices that shape your MC’s personality as well as the world around them to a lesser or bigger degree and narrative branching based on certain choices.
✢ A game of truth and deceit with you as one of the main players. You've been taught to keep your identity and abilities a secret from others, but is secrecy what you truly want?
✢ A magic system of both legal and illegal spells at your disposal. Use them wisely, or you might attract unwanted attention...
Cirern Avari (elven). If the stories are to be trusted, he is the last surviving member of the group of sorcerers unceremoniously named the “Pentagon order”. He is your master and your caretaker, your mentor and your jailor.
Knowledgeable and lonesome, he often seems to be pondering the world which he has now become a reclused observer of. When you first meet him, he is calm and distant, impatient and thoughtful.
Whether you consider him family or a brute who took you away from the life you were meant to live, it can’t be argued that the nineteen years the two of you have spent together has shaped you into the person you are today.
How your presence has affected him, you cannot confidently say. His mind remains as closed off to you now as it did on that snowy winter’s night so long ago.
Perhaps leaving his side is what will finally allow you to learn the truth about him.
Muir (Romance Option, ???). As a being born from the very essence of sorcery, Muir’s existence threads a thin line between mortality and something wholly other. All spellweavers rely on the energy of their magiramús to cast their spells; you rely on this hoary eyed young man to do the same. Aside from his direct and stubborn disposition, he possesses both a palpable kindness and a sense of unmotivated ruthlessness. When you first meet him, he is a dreamy child with curious eyes that seem to hold the universe itself. But as Muir settles into his skin those qualities begin to dim, and his strange sense of wonder turns into awkwardness and uncertainty, eventually hardening him into a stoic and quiet adult.
You don’t know what he is, yet you know him better than anyone. You left your home together; now you must learn to navigate the world together.
Something that’s much easier said than done when your very existence marks you as outlaws.
Wren Parr (Romance Option, elven). One need only look at Wren to know that they’re an agent of the Institute of Arcane Arts. If the robes didn’t give it away, their demeanour certainly would. Arrogance lies deeply embedded in their eyes, and they seem convinced that anyone who looks their way does so with envy. Beneath the exterior they present is a deeply passionate - and occasionally awkward - person.
When you encounter them in the troubled town of Kelmerth during their Practice of Passing, you get to witness firsthand what a student of the most distinguished academy on the continent can do, and what being a product of its teachings really means.
Azora (Romance Option, human). Hailing from the southern land of Ciralor, one of the few human-ruled countries on the continent, Azora is less attuned to the laws of the arcane than a native of Aíos would be. Instead, she tends to rely on the inventions her homeland is both renowned and feared for. She is eloquent and straight-forward and impulsive to a fault – but it is all, according to her, to reclaim her rightful place as Ciralor’s leader. A task that proves difficult when every day is a battle to stay in control of her own body.
Astra (Romance Option, vampiric, formerly human). Astra's gaze always appears to wander, searching for something in the crowds she often surrounds herself with, occasionally locking on to someone who just so happens to catch her interest. Although her muscular stature points to a life of strife, the poise she displays is more befitting of a high born than that of a common thug. Astra can be described as having little regard for mortal lives, and it’s not beyond her to manipulate and scheme to nudge things in the direction she wants them to go. Sometimes that means feasting on the blood of the unsuspecting, and sometimes that is extended to a grander vision and goal. Although she can be cruel, she is also fiercely loyal to those she’s close with and trusts. Beneath her exterior, something darker and more unpredictable simmers, though she rarely allows that side of her to show.
As a vampire, she has little choice but to shun the light of day and seek the comfort that lies in the shadows. Representing the part of her people that refuse to conform to the rules set in place by the less potent, she operates outside of the law, following instead the self-made rules of her Coven.
Kirin (Romance Option, cryn). The order of The Aelesh is enveloped in mystery. Worshipping the world of the unknown, they have chosen to cast aside the Faith in favour of the Truth – and in their eyes, the truth lies beyond that which mortals can comprehend and perceive with their senses. With the simple mask he insists on wearing, your only clue as to Kirin’s true character lies in his voice and body language. Each sparse movement has a purpose, every phrase a veiled meaning. He’s vowed to express his beliefs by following in the footsteps of the Pentagons and to serve them in any way he can. In his opinion, this is currently best done by aiding you.
Kirin is quiet as a shadow and moves much like one, too, walking in and out of your life as he pleases. He is devoted to his beliefs and for all intents and purposes, he seems devoted to serve you, as well. He is practical but also idealistic when it comes to his faith and what he does for that faith. But the nature of his order is vague and difficult to grasp for someone not directly linked to them. Kirin’s personality is hard to pin down since he seems to hide much of it beneath his purpose, just like how he hides his face behind his mask. He is calm, though; sometimes eerily so, and often finds amusement in situations where people might find such amusement distasteful.
Credits
Twine Template: Vahnya
Template Design: Beloved friend no.1
Cover Image: cyanide-chicken
Background Image: cyanide-chicken
Character Portraits (screenshots): holyantenna and cyanide-chicken
Character Portraits (description): holyantenna and mooreaux
Logo Text Creation: kathaeris
Images used in-game: Canva
Created with Twine
Development blog for this project
Updated | 3 hours ago |
Status | In development |
Platforms | HTML5 |
Rating | Rated 5.0 out of 5 stars (58 total ratings) |
Author | Lili |
Genre | Interactive Fiction, Adventure |
Tags | Dark Fantasy, Fantasy, LGBTQIA, Magic, Romance, Story Rich, Text based, Twine |
Links | Blog |
Development log
- Demo is back up!22 days ago
- What's currently being worked on36 days ago
- Writing Update March 202551 days ago
- Adding choices69 days ago
- Demo is back up94 days ago
- Small fixesJan 01, 2025
Comments
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i love this story so so much omg--it's one of my favorite IF's on here, the writing is absolutely wonderful, i love how much choice we get, and the characters are incredibly well-written.
something that i just wanted to point out is during cirern's first lecture in the scavenger route, one of the options is unclickable and looks like: [[“Someone I knew...she seemed to have made a deal with those witches in the forest. Before you came."|Chap1treasquestionask]]
and when you click “Do you have any questions for me?” something that looks like [Error: cannot find a closing tag for HTML <ul>] pops up, but you can still read the response.
can't wait for the next update!
Hi, thank you so much for the sweet comment! The unclickable error is one I unfortunately encounter a lot and it seems to have to do with the quotation marks or something like that; I'll make sure to fix it!
The other error should be fixed now.
So happy you like the story!
one thing i have to bring up, is when you pick elf and nomad as the background... it really is confusing with the childhood section. you would think something about the childs background and race would be mentioned at some point in the prologue but the supporting characters like the father and grandmother feel like they are humans. (which if youre an elf something should be there about being adopted or having an elf mother or elf culture or something). just food for thought.
Hi, thank you so much for the comment! I understand your point, since the nomadic background isn't focused on race like the aristocrat background is. That's mainly because the divide in the nomadic background isn't based on race, but on differing beliefs within the clan regarding its future, relation to forbidden magic and towards the crown. The aristocrat background is focused on race because elves hold the most power and is the most common and accepted race while humans have to fight to stay relevant, but in this case that's a struggle hugely tied to political power and influence. The MC's clan in the nomadic background has its own belief system, but it's not 'elven culture'; it's old beliefs that aren't really tied to any specific race. But it's something I could probably expand on - I'll keep your feedback in mind in case I think of some way of incorporating it in the nomadic background at a later date!
This was something. Something beautiful and it satisfied my world-building, lore thirsty side. I love the story so much, it piqued my interest and now when the demo ended, I'm looking forward for more (and more of Muir of course). There was so much you could learn, different perspectives, backgrounds, overall awesome. It feels so high quality and Its obviously carefully curated. Ahhhhhhh I'm so excited for more!!!!! I love Muir so much 🥰.
Thank you so much for the kind comment <3 I'm really happy you enjoyed what's there so far!
I am enjoying this so far, but there are a couple of continuity errors that take me out of the story. I chose the Thief background and had a companion who was a Cryn and described her appearance , but the first time I meet Kirin, it says I have only read about them and have no idea what they look like.
Hi and thanks for your comment! Sorry to hear about the continuity error; could you please tell me whether this happens when the MC is a child during the "Escape" section with the cryn child or whether it happens in chapter 1 when you meet Kirin towards the end of the demo?
During the "Escape" part, there's a variable that says that you have only read about cryn if you play the aristocrat background and didn't choose to play as cryn yourself during character creation. It's possible that this variable is buggy and appears when you played the scavenger background too; I'm going to investigate and see whether that's the case and change it accordingly if so.
I can't recall mentioning Kirin being cryn in chapter 1 since he doesn't reveal his appearance, but there's a lot of text to keep track of and it's very possible I might have missed it!
EDIT: I got to this very late since I've taken a break from working on this game, but I looked into this further and changed some code. It should be fixed now :)
I tried to pick the dark theme but it looks like this. I'm sorry to bother if this is intended. Have a good day!
Hi! Thanks for reporting - it's no bother at all, though I'm aware of the issue :) it's not something I've gotten around to fix yet since other things have been taking priority. The original template had a dark mode which then turned out like thos when my friend was kind enough to redesign the template for me and make it into what it looks like now haha. I'm going to see if it can be fixed at a later date! Thanks a lot <3
Thank you and have a good day!
I really enjoyed and was intrigued by the prologue, just some minor typos and awkward flow (from variables I'd guess) here and there, I unfortunately didn't think to make note of where though, sorry!
The beginning of chapter 1 confused me however. I'm a little bit lost about what we're setting out to do, I'm not sure if I missed something but it does feel like I'm missing a bunch of context. At one point a curse is mentioned as if I was supposed to know about it but had no idea what it was talking about. There's also a point where my MC asks Muir what happened with the Garm and it just completely skips any response to that question.
I have some screenshots of some coding errors I came across but I apparently can't fit them all in this comment so I'll reply to this with them!
Sorry this was so long, this story is intriguing and I'm looking forward to more!
Hi! Thanks a lot for taking the time to send those screenshots and giving your feedback, it means a lot <3 I'll make sure to go through the screenshots soon and correct the mistakes there. Sorry in advance for the super long text; I wanted to explain thoroughly and properly!
As for the confusion you mentioned in chapter 1 - I understand where you're coming from. There might be instances where the transition isn't smooth enough because I actually wrote chapter 1 before writing any of the content present in prologue part I and II. That being said, I'm also deliberately keeping a lot of things vague since I want to reveal things bit by bit and letting you get used to the world instead of exposition dump an explanation for everything right away.
Although you get to play a bit of the MC's childhood, there's a 19 year time skip where the reader isn't really informed of what the MC has experienced during their time with Cirern and I want to delve into that bit by bit rather than all at once :) but I'm going to go over that part again! It's really helpful to know what is and isn't clear to readers since I already have all the information and it's difficult for me to determine that while proofreading. So thank you for that!
Can I ask you to specify what you meant by 'curse'? If you mean the part where the MC can't talk about certain things with Fri regarding their past, that's specified during the "Contract" part of the prologue if you say yes to knowing the terms of the contract.
And about the awkward transitions, that's a bug; there are quite a few variables involving the garm and Fri, and what Muir says differs, but the text where it says that he speaks and then doesn't say anything is a bug. I thought I had it fixed but I must have missed a variable there. Will look into that too!
Thank you so much for your feedback, I'm going to take it with me when I go back to editing chapter 1! And sorry again for the extremely long answer lmao ;;
Hi! Thank you for the thorough reply, and no worries about the length!
About the curse thing, that was the moment with Fri I was talking about so that must be it. I decided my MC wouldn't ask about the terms in the moment as a child (being already shy and now with fresh trauma), so I had no idea he couldn't talk about parts of his past.
I appreciate you taking the time to read my initial comments and reply!
Ohh! Okay, I definitely see the issue. I will make a note of adding something in chapter 1 for those who chose not to hear the terms of the contract to avoid confusion there.
And it's no problem at all, thank you again for bringing this to my attention <3
On iphone I can’t load a save from disk simply because I can’t find a load button.
Might be blocked by the iphone ui at the bottom of the screen?
I'm so sorry to hear that ): it sounds like it might be an issue with the iphone ui to me, yes. I've been testing the game on my phone and can see the load button just fine, but I have a different type of phone. Is there a way you could temporarily hide the ui bar and see if it works that way?
I was able to mess around with it and hide the ui at the bottom but for some reason it just displayed piece of the character art from the main page rather than anything below the save button.
Fortunately I was able to get back to where I was in the story quite quickly thanks to your optional content skips when starting a new story so thank you for those.
No worries! I'm so glad that helped and that you managed to find a solution!
if you choose Astra as a love interest will you be able to choose to also be turned to a vampire if you chose human cause the life spans and all that if not I’ll just choose elf then:>
Haha that would be a bit spoilery to answer, but humans and elves can both turn into vampires. Astra was a human being before she was turned. Cryn are a bit more tricky in that regard though!
oooh ok I wasn’t sure if elves could be turn too lol thank you so much for the reply!:] I love story already. Was just asking in case I had picked and had the option with Astra but wasn’t able to with being elf I would be heartbroken
<3 I'm so glad you're enjoying it!
ITS BACKKK im so jolly
Thanks to you reposting this on your tumblr, I could read it for the first time, and I love it so far!
I had a couple of errors though, sadly.
These are typos and minor issues.
But then after the garm fight, at least if fighting it with strength, I couldn't get past the decision about what to do with Fri (I picked to heal him, but it happens with all three options):
And I can actually continue - once I click "ok", I can't click on the choice anymore, so I'm stuck on that page.
Oh no, I'm so sorry! I was fixing a stat there earlier today and playtested to make sure it worked, but I didn't test far enough it seems. I'll look into this tomorrow and will try to solve it as soon as I can along with fixing the other errors. Thank you so much for reporting it!
There's no rush! Thanks!
I think I've solved the last error and also fixed the writing and coding mistakes. There's still some stuff I know I need to fix around the garm fight, but you should be able to play through it without getting stuck on the page now (I hope!!). Sorry for the inconvenience, please let me know if you encounter any other issues!
Dark theme makes the words too bright to read, against the yellow background
Hi! Yes, I know - it happened when the UI design changed. It's something I'm going to look into, but it's not a priority right now since I have a lot of other things to focus on when it comes to the demo. Thanks a lot for reporting it nonetheless!
Hi! No, the demo doesn't end there. This is an oversight on my end - I knew there were instances like this where I've made some errors with some variables which leads to a dead end but didn't realize there were so many. I'm so sorry about that!
I was planning on fixing it properly next week since I'm currently in the process of writing more content for the final version of the demo, but I'll take the time I have today and tomorrow to go through the prologue and fix this instead. Thank you so much for reporting this!
no worries I just replayed until the real end of the demo I really enjoyed it so far!!
Thanks a lot, I'm happy you liked it!
Very very very promising I really have/want to give this a second playthrough because there's already so many things I want to bite into with the writing and characters
Thank you so much! It makes me super happy to know that the characters and writing resonate with you!
Hi! I love how the story is going so far, but I have a small issue. After the first part of the prologue, on the very first page of the second part, there isn't an option to click to the next page. I've tried reloading or clicking different options, but I always end up on that page without a way forward. Is this a bug, or is that where the current demo ends? The game is great otherwise though!
Hi, thanks a lot for reading and for reporting this! There's quite a bit more content after the first part of the prologue. I'll see what the issue could be and let you know when it's fixed.
Would you be okay telling me which background you chose and whether you see the "End of Prologue Part I" button displayed at the end when completing your background or not, just so I can narrow things down and make it easier to locate the problem? :) If you don't want to say what background you played through when this issue popped up that's totally fine though.
I'm happy you're enjoying it so far despite this!
Hello, thanks for responding! I chose the scavenger background, and I did see the "End of Prologue Part I" button. However, I did also go back and play the nomad background and also received the same problem.
Okay, thanks a lot for the info! I have limited time this weekend but I'll look into it more thoroughly asap <3
EDIT: I've been looking through the background stories and can't seem to find the issue as I'm able to progress to prologue part II without problem; maybe I'm misunderstanding where exactly this happens? I'll be playing through everything sometime soon and see if I can locate it though :)
That's alright, thank you for trying to locate the issue! I'll try playing through the game again, and it could be an issue on my part. If you are able to find it, I'll appreciate it if you inform me :) Thanks!
Will definitely let you know when/if I do! Thanks again!
I want to physically grasp this story and hold it very politely, the way you might hold a chick. In a positive way, I mean. Very positive.
Haha aww, I love this comment, it's so sweet. Thank you so much!
Really solid opening. The cast is intriguing and has me wanting to try the other origins. Good book
Thanks a lot for your comment, I'm very happy you like it so far!
by GOD this is some good stuf!!!
Both the writing and the characterisation is great, the charm in the big letters that start chapters is also great.
Please take your time working on this but also please know that i'm frothing at the mouth for more
Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such a sweet comment! More will definitely be coming - hopefully soon if everything goes as planned. So happy you enjoyed <3
MFs better be reading this! Good ifs are hard to come by and this is awesome! Scout level IF I'm so happy that I found this!
Anyways praying for this to blow up!
Oh wow, thank you so much! I'm so happy you like it. I hope the rest of it will live up to your expectations <3 !
hello! i have moments where whenever i do certain choices or etc, i bassicly get an empty page and can't continue. Im currentily pretty much softlocked in a scene with muir talking about hunters, because when i press continue. I get a blank page and no chance to continue. Is this a bug or just a way the story is finished? Other then that i really enjoy the story and the vibe of it!! ^^
Hi! Oh no, that's definitely not supposed to happen. I'll have a look at that ASAP. Thank you so much for letting me know! <3 glad you enjoy it so far despite that issue!
Hi again! I checked it again and realized i still could continue if i went with a diffrent choice so all not that bad! Also just want to know is there a certain place where i could submit bugs, code mistakes or something in general of that? Since i don't want to fill up the whole comments with the mentions of the blank pages and so on lol, because other then that the story is really intresting and good! (i got till the end of the demo and aaa can't wait to read more ^^)
It would be easiest do do it on my Tumblr blog which is linked at the end of this page (before "more information"). You could send me an ask (anonymously or not) or a message there with code mistakes/bugs/errors etc. if you'd like! Thank you so much for taking the time both to read my story and report these bugs and errors, I really appreciate it <3 I'm still looking through things to find the empty page issue you mentioned + fixing some other things, sorry it's taking so long!
EDIT: I managed to locate one of the empty pages you mentioned and corrected it. Will be on the lookout for more :)